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[ Harry Potter ] FanFic ^^ [spoilerd n bissl vllt :P]

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  • [ Harry Potter ] FanFic ^^ [spoilerd n bissl vllt :P]

    yeaaaaaah hier kommts der erste teil XD

    THE POTTERS


    Chapter 1 - Hogwarts


    Spoiler
    “…if it matters to you, you’ll be able to choose Gryffindor or Slytherin. The Sorting Hat takes your choice into account.”

    “Albus, Albus Severus!”, someone whispered in his ear. Albus jumped up took his wand and shoutet in Panic “whos there?” James started to laugh. “You where Sleeping bro”, James said half laughing, “the train has stopped, we reached Hogwarts! Go get your stuffs fast bro,
    I wanna take a look on hogwarts. Dad told us so many things about it.” So they get their stuffs out of the train. Albus was very proud of that owl he got at his birthday from his father.
    His father wanted to name it Hedwig.

    After they gone out of the train, a huge man.. nah it was the biggest Albus had ever seen, appeared in front of him and he called "New students to me ! New students to mee!''.
    The huge man had a lot of gray hairs and he looked quite old. "You must be Hagrid!?",
    Albus asked him. "My father told me much things about you." The man looked down to Albus and James and smiled. "You must be Harrys sons! He told me that you are coming this year... great, great!" he laughed "so all new students follow me please!"
    So they did. They had a wonderfull view at the Hogwarts Castle by crossing the river with the boats. Albus noticed that only the newcomer's where taken to the Castle that way.
    The other students gone another way into the forest and disappeared. But Albus had known where they're going. They're going to the coaches carried by thestrales. His father told him a lot about thestrales.....

    Finally they reached the Castle. At the Entrence there was a woman waiting for the newcomers. "Hello all", the woman shoutet "In the interest of all teachers and students here I want to welcome you on the Hogwards school of wizardy and witchcraft. You will enter the Great Hall now where's waiting the Sorting Hat, to choose which house will be yours.
    Hufflepuff, Slytherin, Ravenclaw or Gryffindor".
    "I want Gryffindor! Not slytherin!!" Alb thought deeply in his mind.

    Then they entered the hall, Hundreds of scholars where sitting there at the four tables, and they all looked to the Newcomers. Albus felt a bit nervous....




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    mir war soo langweillig ^^ bitte net böse sein wenn da viele fehler in meiner englischen grammatik sind
    Zuletzt geändert von R.A.B; 25.07.2007, 10:26.
    ....I want you to know
    that it was me who has stolen your secret
    who has stolen your horcrux...

  • #2
    Hallo RAB,

    kannst du bitte den Text auch noch in Spoilerklammern setzen? Zumindest bis der deutsche Band raus ist.

    Die Admins haben für Teil sieben bewusst Regeln erstellt. Sie haben zwar nur Teil 7 allgemein angegeben, aber Fanfiction den Teil 7 betreffend, fällt glaube ich auch unter diese Regeln.
    Nicht jeder hat die Zeit das Buch in 2-3 Tagen gelesen zu haben oder möchte vielleicht auf die deutsche Version warten.

    Den Anfang find ich gar nicht mal schlecht, dafür das es Fan Fiction ist. Etwas mehr Detailverliebtheit wäre schön
    Und warum fängst du am Zielbahnhof an? Die Zugfahrt dürfte doch wohl auch ein Kapitel wert sein.
    Just because it is the truth doesn't mean anyone wants to know about it.
    Alle vier Jahre machen die Wähler ihr Kreuz. Und hinterher müssen sie's dann tragen. - Ingrit Berg-Khoshnavaz
    Statt 'Gier' sagen wir 'Profitmaximierung', und schon wird aus der Sünde eine Tugend. - Ulrich Wickert

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    • #3
      wird gemacht^^ ööh keine ahnung wusst net so recht wo anzufangen
      ....I want you to know
      that it was me who has stolen your secret
      who has stolen your horcrux...

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      • #4
        Hey! Gar nicht schlecht für ne Fanfiction!
        Solltest du ausbauen!!! Ich würd auf jedenfall weiter

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